Come Out Again (Choka)

By Christopher Rupley

 

If only I could

find a way back to my love,

to what’s stowed inside,

to what my anger concealed

and helped me decline –

Return from your rock shelter

 

Don’t be mad at me

for all my crass wandering,

for choosing first my ego…

 

(This is a form of Waka called Choka, and the count is 5-7-5-7-5-7…5-7-7).

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16 thoughts on “Come Out Again (Choka)

  1. The poem wasn’t about another person, it was about the love inside of ourselves…that’s what I was referring to. But, I understand what you mean…

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  2. Wow, how flattering. I’ve only collaborated with one poet, one time; and twice wrote response poems for 2 poets (sort of like collaboration, but not really). So, I’m not certain how you’d want this to work. Can you give me a brief idea that I can mull over?

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  3. I’m rereading it from my other blog now. It’s the last 3 lines that I find confusing, which made me think it was written to or about another person. The other lines make sense to me– that you’re speaking about “the love inside ourselves”–so I like that part.

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  4. I understand the confusion completely. I can be pretty selfish, and I was referring to my sense of self, or ‘self’ for short…I was also exploring the divide between our ego and self.

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  5. A short form is fine with me. It’s going to be easier to do this via email, btw…How about we just do a nonet to begin? It is a 9 line poem and the count, in descending order is: 9-8-7-6-5-4-3-2-1

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  6. Haha. I just replied to your other comment asking, and directed you here. Hahahaha! Well, glad you found it and still can’t wait to see what you come up with!

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  7. Don’t worry about what other people think of your poetry. It’s for you, not them 🙂 And, I think it is wonderful. It’s a beautiful form to work with when doubling too, because then it becomes this passionate dialogue of sorts between lovers. You should try it with another writer 🙂 Have a great day!

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